nature haiku

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nature haiku

Post by illyav » Tue Sep 20, 2016 6:32 pm

I wrote this haiku in a poetry workshop I took last year:


creek cascades down,
pooling and overflowing—
endless beginnings








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Re: nature haiku

Post by rlown » Tue Sep 20, 2016 6:37 pm

Sierra in View
So many places to see
Hard to pick just one

Had a friend I worked with for 10 years. We communicated sometimes in Haiku. Nice one though.

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Re: nature haiku

Post by Jimr » Tue Sep 20, 2016 7:38 pm

Now I'm inspired. Gotta figure this one out.
“Posterity! You will never know, how much it cost the present generation, to preserve your Freedom! I hope you will make a good use of it. If you do not, I shall repent in Heaven, that I ever took half the pains to preserve it.”

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Re: nature haiku

Post by rlown » Tue Sep 20, 2016 7:50 pm

if you want more syllables to work with, look up Tanka.. otherwise, the cadence is 5, 7, 5. Heck, all mgmt slides should be just that. :)

illyav's was better than mine. supposed to twist the last line with meaning.

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Re: nature haiku

Post by Jimr » Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:02 pm

Cascading slowly
icy tendrils envelope
Another night's sleep
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Re: nature haiku

Post by rlown » Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:04 pm

=D>

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Post by Jimr » Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:05 pm

rlown wrote:if you want more syllables to work with, look up Tanka.. otherwise, the cadence is 5, 7, 5. Heck, all mgmt slides should be just that. :)

illyav's was better than mine. supposed to twist the last line with meaning.
Russ, if that was for me, my initial post wasn't supposed to be haiku :unibrow:
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Re: nature haiku

Post by rlown » Tue Sep 20, 2016 8:08 pm

it was for you.. you did well.

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Re: nature haiku

Post by Jimr » Tue Sep 20, 2016 11:13 pm

\:D/
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Re: nature haiku

Post by The Other Tom » Wed Sep 21, 2016 6:40 am

I'm not much of an artsy person, but I like it :) Good job!

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